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amediaI just feel it important to point out that, if it weren't for my beta-reader, Cain's nipples would not have made an appearance in Shivering.
Before beta:
After beta:
Before beta:
"Hey! It's cold in here!" Cain protested.
"I can tell," Glitch said, amused. "You're all goosebumps." He stroked
his hand down Cain's exposed chest and Cain found himself shivering from
something other than the cold. Abruptly Glitch let go of Cain's wrists.
"Take your pants off," he ordered. Cain hesitated. "Now," Glitch said,
with a cold command in his tone.
After beta:
"Hey! It's cold in here!" Cain protested.
"I can tell," Glitch said, amused, as he finished with the vest and unbuttoned the shirt beneath. "You're all goosebumps." He stroked his hand down Cain's exposed chest. Cain shivered as Glitch's hand brushed deliberately over his nipples; when Glitch circled his navel with one lazy finger, Cain gasped and arched his back.
Glitch let go of Cain's wrists. "Take your pants off," he ordered. Cain hesitated. "Now," Glitch said, with a cold command in his tone.
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Date: 2009-01-21 03:07 am (UTC)...we seem to be thoroughly gutter-minded this evening.
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Date: 2009-01-21 03:18 am (UTC)You say that like it's a GOOD thing!
'Cause it is!
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Date: 2009-02-03 02:59 am (UTC)*bows* Thank you, ma'am! (and for the icon usage, too [veg])
*lays a trail of
Caingerbread cookies* little pieces of cake leading to the Dark Side**
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Date: 2009-02-03 03:07 am (UTC)Now... frosting and Nilla wafers*.. :)
*if no Nilla wafers are available, Robert Conrad is an acceptable substitute...
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Date: 2009-02-03 03:15 am (UTC)Sorry I can't put frosting on him (to be licked off, obviously) ...
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Date: 2009-02-03 03:17 am (UTC)Fun fact: RC is now and forever Adora Cain's father.
Thanks. o.O
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Date: 2009-02-03 03:24 am (UTC)I believe you! Great minds, parallel gutters. ;-)
RC is now and forever Adora Cain's father.
Great casting! I can get behind that one. (And not just because I wanna see ... ahem.)
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Date: 2009-02-03 03:26 am (UTC)Damnit, Steve!